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  1. Page 20: Genertela custom -> Genertelan custom

    Page 20: turned from his feasts -> turned away from his feasts

    Page 21: provides his aunt -> provides his cousin 

    Page 22: Brew - the levels of quality partially differ from those in the Craft (Brewing) text box on page 23. Excellent seems to equate to Magical, and Superb even better, but with undefined qualities. Perhaps Excellent and Superb equate to levels of Magical?

    Ditto Brew on Page 94.

    Page 25: who married the Only Old One and who was the son of Argan Argar -> who married the Only Old One, the son of Argan Argar

    Page 25: countless oreads -> countless oreads (mountain nymphs) [Suggestion only - defined on page 26]

    Page 26: sight of Kero Fin, -> sight of Kero Fin. [comma instead of fullstop]

    Page 26: admit identity -> admit a common identity [other possibilities for wording]

  2. Page 97: Due to her boisterous nature - should be indented as start of a paragraph.

    Page 101: Miscellaneous Notes - it might be useful to mention the names and locations of volcanoes in Dragon Pass?

    Page 111: The Decamony does not official condemn -> The Decamony does not officially condemn 

    Page 112: After long conflict -> After a long conflict

    Page 115: gray age -> Grey Age [?]

    General: savanna or savannah? Savannas and savannah both used here.

    Page 117: The Arbennan people of the Pamaltelan savannah worship Pamalt as is common throughout Dragon Pass - suggest: The Arbennan people of the Pamaltelan savannah worship Pamalt as the people of Dragon Pass worship their gods.

    Page 122: and associated with his household -> and associated his household

    Page 124: The dead remained to the Underworld -> The dead remained in the Underworld

    Page 127: The Earthshaker provides her niece with Blast Earth -> The Earthshaker provides her aunt with Blast Earth.

  3. Page 77: The women ensure that the blood pours onto the grave to the accompanying Earth rites -> The women ensure that the blood pours onto the grave in the accompanying Earth rites.

    Page 80: They are however, treated as Herd Priestesses by the Storm Bull cult. [Not sure what this implies as this is in the Herd Priestess section. Am wondering if this should be in the Herd Sister section]

    Page 89: Langiappe -> Lagniappe

     

  4. 8 hours ago, Erol of Backford said:

    So which side would win and what would the casualties be on each side? 

    Combat is never predictable.

    8 hours ago, Erol of Backford said:

    Are there any famous kopis and who, namely, would have them... scimitars are more the Lunr style but..

    Kopis are used by most Lunar soldiers.

  5. 13 minutes ago, Erol of Backford said:

    Is AaEoDP canon, just curious as if it's on the Drive Through I assumed not?

    Not canonical. The Army List details are derived from published and unpublished material by Greg Stafford.

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  6. Page 19: landscape spirits, snake daughters -> landscape spirits, Snake Daughters

    Page 30: and in Old Prax -> and in Old Pavis

    Page 32: still provide touch with the spirit -> still provide contact with the spirit

    Page 34: is stuck in the brain -> is stuck into the brain [the sentence reads oddly]

    Page 35: four years total -> four years in total

    Page 35: This spell merges the caster’s consciousness with their bow -> This spell merges the caster’s consciousness with their elf bow

    Page 37: Fear Rune spell -> Fear Rune Spell

    Page 40: I can only remember them as gods now - need to explain who 'I' is. Belintar. Perhaps needs an explanation in the introduction?

    Page 40: opposes the It Potential -> opposes the it Potential

    Page 41: and the takers began to take themselves -> and the Takers began to take themselves

    Page 46:

    can draw upon the guardian spirit’s magic

    points while within the precincts of the structure.

    [Formatting error?]

    Page 46: become a priestess of Asrelia with further requirements [What are the further requirements?] Maybe this should read: become a priestess of Asrelia with no further requirements.

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  7. 4 hours ago, Erol of Backford said:

    So when the Black Horse Troop fight the Hell Sisters, I am thinking both have the same or similar mounts and the Hell Sisters are witches of some magical potency are they able to overcome the Black Horse Troop as they are less magical in nature, the Black Horse Troop horseman that is or are they Hero Questers and this fight would be epic in battle/weaponry but also magical in nature?

    The Hell Sisters ride Daron horses, not demons.

    Details in my book: 

    https://www.drivethrurpg.com/product/296535/The-Armies-and-Enemies-of-Dragon-Pass?

  8. Page 92: with the issue that followed in his wake -> with the issues that followed in his wake [Debatable]

    Page 93: Rune spell for free -> Rune spells for free

    Page 94: They are mindless and are whipped into an enraged passion and frenzy until the very stuff of their souls is worn away into the grit of the chaparral sands. [Start of paragraph should be indented?]

    General: for some reason searching the PDF for sea gods finds the term hidden in many of the introductory deity images/text.

    General: Sometimes Sea Gods, Sea gods, seagods. Sea Gods on page 96.

    General: Sometimes Storm Gods, Storm gods

    General: Sometimes Air Gods, Air gods, air gods

    Page 98: stacked with Rain (page 71) - The spell Rain isn't in this book. It is on page 336 of RQG but should be given here?

    Page 99: a River Priest can ritually withdraw Heler’s blessing -> a Rain Priest can ritually withdraw Heler’s blessing

    Page 99: They provide Cloud Call -> He provides Cloud Call

    Page 99: western Dusk Gates -> western Dusk Gate [or Gate of Dusk]

    Page 101: Humakt’s main worship is among the Storm worshipers of Genertela, and in Enkloso and Vralos in Pamaltela - and Umathela?

    Page 105: Should Sense Assassin be detailed here? Sense Chaos is defined for Storm Bull so this omission seems unintended. 

    Page 125: The Bearwalker is fully supported by their liege -> The Champion is fully supported by their liege

    Page 134: cults from Prax -> cults of Prax

    Page 138: Need to clarify whether Decrease Temperature can reduce the temperature to zero and lower.

    Page 149: The Roaring God Ygg is the son of Vadrus and the sea goddess Neliomi - the next page contradicts this and says - Ygg is a rapacious son of Vadrus, the god of violent and destructive change, and Nelarrina, a minor goddess of the Neliomi Sea

    Page 152: Ygg hates the Kingdom of Logic and its heirs (Brithos, Loskalm) -> Ygg hates the Kingdom of Logic and its heirs (Brithos and Loskalm)

    Page 152: Ygg hates the Kingdom of Logic and its heirs (Brithos, Loskalm) [Also Seshnela?]

    End of first pass.

     

     

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  9. Page 1: Vinga should be a secondary header under Orlanth?

    Page 2: the Lightbringers’ Quest was unique in that it moved through the realms, tying them together and making important links fall apart - fall apart seems wrong, perhaps - restoring important links

    Page 11: Gray Lords -> Grey Lords [One instance of Gray Lords in the book, two of Grey Lords]

    Page 31: Craft (woodworking) -> Craft (carpentry) [See RQG page 185]

    Page 43: healing arts -> Healing Arts [Two instances]

    Page 43: From Aldrya, hey can learn the spirit magic spell of Preserve Herbs -> From Aldrya, they can learn the spirit magic spell of Preserve Herbs.

    Page 48: Marsh, chaparral -> Marsh, chaparral, grassland, steppes [?]

    Page 69: The Blue Philosophers: They range far and broad -> The Blue Philosophers: They range far and wide [odd wording]

    Page 70: Every Year during the Sacred Time -> Every year during the Sacred Time

    Page 70: pilgrim Sages arrive at the Spike -> pilgrim Sages arrive at the Block

    Page 71: Oratory (from the associate cult of Eurmal) -> Orate (from the associate cult of Eurmal)

    Page 71: Oratory (from the associate cult of Eurmal) - Eurmal does not have a skill of Oratory/Orate - should this be Issaries or Orlanth?

    Page 78: Craft (woodworking) -> Craft (carpentry) [See RQG page 185]

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  10. 4 hours ago, Erol of Backford said:

    Miskos once lay at the mouth of the Syphon River, it was abandoned due to unknown circumstances. It's not on contemporary maps...

    What happened there? Did something terrible come from the Bay and carry off the population? Beasts from the Sea? Videli slavers? Plague?

    Why isn't there any reporting of what happened or is there and its been covered up?

    Miskos was abandoned after the Vent erupted. Even though most of the ash went westward towards Slontos, there was still a tsunami that hit Miskos hard. It was abandoned and Backford founded.

    https://wellofdaliath.chaosium.com/history-of-kethaela-the-second-age/

    Basically the city was hit by a huge 'tidal wave' and swept away or buried in mud.

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  11. On 8/6/2023 at 7:27 PM, Erol of Backford said:

    When looking for the Earth Temple at Vorda Hill, there seem to be a set of monoliths at the top.

    That would be a minor temple of Orlanth Thunderous. The Earth Temple is at the base.

  12. 13 hours ago, metcalph said:
    • Melib is shown as having a significant population of Lightbringer worship.  Not just the city of Dosakayo but perhaps up to a third of the island.

    One of Greg's maps Jeff shared a while ago, showed Dawn Age Lightbringer missionaries reaching western Melib.

  13. 1 hour ago, Malin said:

    Is there anything else I need to consider?  (also, hi!)

    As Nick says, thanking people is always good; I also try to add a Sources list of publications, whether official or Jonstown Compendium.

    My current project includes this:

    Screenshot 2023-08-04 184627.png

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  14. 8 hours ago, Scorus said:

    I'm afraid you'll need to explain this one to me like I'm five. 🙂  The Night ends and the Dawn begins before the Dawn?

    It's like any sunrise - the sky lightens from black to grey pr dark blue, and gradually more color appears, and then the dawn comes and the sun rises.

    So after the Great Darkness, there was the Grey Age, and then the Dawn and the birth of Time.

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