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Exciting news - the Glorantha Sourcebook manuscript is finished, and we'll have it and the draft 13th Age in Glorantha Rulesbook at Gen Con!

So if you're coming to Gen Con, come see Rob Heinsoo at the Pelgrane booth (#419), and Jeff and Chaosium at booth 423 - these are next door to each other - so if you find one of us you may have found us all. We’d love to talk about 13th Age in Glorantha.

See more in Rob Heinsoo's latest Kickstarter update: https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/416625372/13th-age-in-glorantha/posts/1642790

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<drools quietly>

Didn't KS this 13G (RQ is my Gloranthan drug of choice), but for sure I plan to get the Sourcebook! To be clear:  this is the bare MS. (without art/layout/etc), correct?

Will there be a non-backers "Pre-Order" option through Backerkit, the way there was for RQ:Classic?

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I actually thought this may have been a 'KS-exclusive' book which is to arrive alongside the 13th Age Glorantha book.

Considering I'm not a D20 player, this book as a stretch goal was my main incentive for backing the 13th Age Glorantha project in the first place.... :-(

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10 hours ago, g33k said:

<drools quietly>

Didn't KS this 13G (RQ is my Gloranthan drug of choice), but for sure I plan to get the Sourcebook! To be clear:  this is the bare MS. (without art/layout/etc), correct?

Correct.

10 hours ago, g33k said:

Will there be a non-backers "Pre-Order" option through Backerkit, the way there was for RQ:Classic?

Probably; nothing has been decided yet

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52 minutes ago, Mankcam said:

I actually thought this may have been a 'KS-exclusive' book which is to arrive alongside the 13th Age Glorantha book.

Considering I'm not a D20 player, this book as a stretch goal was my main incentive for backing the 13th Age Glorantha project in the first place.... :-(

However it is made available, it will go out to 13th Age Glorantha Kickstarter backers first, who we appreciate have been waiting a long time.

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Ever since Jeff told us that this book is myth-centric, I've really been looking forward to it. Can't wait to get my hands on it (shame I missed the Kickstarter).

 

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This is the book I want.  Not interested in the 13G, no offense to those guys and their great game, but I'm really wanting the sourcebook for it's mythology.

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Perhaps more Gloranthan products can be made like this in future, just narrative content, no game stats at all - this way it appeals to players of RQ, HQ, OQ, Mythras, 13G, or whatever takes your fancy. Also I think there is a growing number of people who are interested in the setting of Glorantha who are not into games, much like Middle Earth. The G2G has been the game changer here.

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Have been sending in comments on the Sourcebook (four pages of comments so far, after a skim and commencing a detailed read-through) but am uncertain if they are being received. Mostly typos.

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3 hours ago, M Helsdon said:

Have been sending in comments on the Sourcebook (four pages of comments so far, after a skim and commencing a detailed read-through) but am uncertain if they are being received. Mostly typos.

I presume you KS-backed, and are reviewing an early-release draft available to backers only?

 

  

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4 hours ago, g33k said:

I presume you KS-backed, and are reviewing an early-release draft available to backers only?  

I also backed the KS and I have had a look at the last manuscript. I wonder if it is OK to even comment briefly about it here?

(see bottom of the post after translating it into your favourite language with the Translation gadget on the right margin)

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I've sent a list of typos and had no response as well.

Some feedback would help.

Also would it not be better to post the corrections somewhere like here, so we avoid duplication?

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12 hours ago, g33k said:

I presume you KS-backed, and are reviewing an early-release draft available to backers only?

You presume correctly. I've been delayed by looking at The Eleven Lights and something else.

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On ‎11‎/‎19‎/‎2016 at 6:02 AM, jongjom said:

I've sent a list of typos and had no response as well.

Some feedback would help.

Also would it not be better to post the corrections somewhere like here, so we avoid duplication?

Duplication shouldn't matter as the editor should resolve them all - and in any review process, it is rare for all the reviewers to detect all the same things. I believe I have a 'hit rate' of around 60%...

Below are my comments so far, derived from a quick six hour skim through the entire document, and then from a careful read through, which has taken eight hours so far, up to around page 58.

General: Humaktsson or Humaktson? Both appear in the document: the former twice, the latter three times.

General: ie should be i.e.

General: Phargantites or Phargentites? Both used once.

General: sometimes creation is given a capital letter, often not.

General: The Deities of the Earth chapter gives each deity a section title, unlike the earlier chapters. This continues in subsequent chapters.

General: pantheon sometimes given a capital letter, sometimes not.

General: war god or War God (and goddess). Appears with capital letters and without.

 

Page 3: List of daughters might include Dorasta? Possibly not, as Genert and his daughter Pelora had lesser daughters?

Page 3: The crude geography of the continent begins with the great Genert’s Wastes - read oddly, suggest - A crude geography of the continent begins with the great Genert’s Wastes.

Page 4: and a variety of isolated and oscure creatures - should be - and a variety of isolated and obscure creatures

Page 4: humans live a lush pastroral life - should be - humans live a lush pastoral life

Page 4: joined with city-states Jrustela - might be - joined with the city-states of Jrustela

Page 4: Pendarli lion people - should be - Pendali lion people

Page 4: place of Pamalt - should be - Place of Pamalt

Page 4: She is the Mother of Hsunchen, the and the dedicated supporter - might be - She is the Mother of Hsunchen, and the dedicated supporter

Page 4: Suam Chong - twice, should be - Suam Chow

Page 6: Might mention that the Moon Rune metal is silver.

Page 6: The various names for this Rune illustrate the ideas behind it - might give some of the names.

Page 8: This RRune is little used - should be - This Rune is little used

Page 9: and anything in between, A hierarchy officiates at - should be - and anything in between. A hierarchy officiates at

Page 10: The Age of Time, during which we live, is that of Compromise - might be - The Age of Time, during which we live, is that of the Compromise

Page 11: Lhankhor Mhy cult, but very knowledgable - should be Lhankhor Mhy cult, but very knowledgeable

Page 11: Mularik Iron-eye - named in the Guide as - Mularik Ironeye

Page 11: Lhankhor Mhy cult - should be - Lhankor Mhy

Page 12: Rune masters, demigods - should be - Rune Masters, demigods

Page 14: Dragon Pass residents are certain of three - should be - Dragon Pass residents are certain of four

Page 14: Known True Dragons are rare. Dragon Pass and Kralorela are known to have several each, mostly very small examples - suggest - Known True Dragons are rare. Dragon Pass and Kralorela are recognized to have several each, mostly very small examples.

Page 15: Thus. individuals were able - should be - Thus individuals were able

Page 17: ORENOAR - should be in bold

Page 18: and the god-learners - should be - and the God Learners

Page 18: children are the catgod - should be - children are the cat-god

Page 18: gives humans their intial - should be gives humans their initial

Page 18: omnipresent sprectre of Death - should be - omnipresent specter of Death

Page 18: the Iynx-spirit - should be - the lynx-spirit

Page 18: The Xeotam Dialogures - should be - The Xeotam Dialogues

Page 18: Their parts in the cosmos have not - might be - Their part in the cosmos has not

Page 19: Fornoarian titles - possibly - Fornaorian or Fornao? The names in this section are very similar to the Enerali names given in the Guide, page 373.

Page 19: Zrethus, God of the Sky - possibly Zrenthus?

Page 20: child of Gata and Zrathus - possibly - child of Gata and Zrenthus

Page 20: fallen in savagery - should be - fallen into savagery

Page 20: the Surface World was people by the pure races of the Hsunchen - should be - the Surface World was peopled by the pure races of the Hsunchen

Page 20: between a Kolat – should be - between a Kolati

Page 22: In myths,she has - should be - In myths, she has

Page 23: but those who living kin – should be - but those whose living kin

Page 23: their corpses to an eternal glory of fighting for eternity – suggest - their corpses to an eternal glory of fighting in perpetuity

Page 24: When Darkness finally overpowered the world and the legions of Night came to surround the Spike. Argan Argar – should be - When Darkness finally overpowered the world and the legions of Night came to surround the Spike, Argan Argar

Page 27: Thus is the profusion of fish - should be - Thus is the profusion of fish.

Page 28: rather than descendant – suggest - rather than a descendant

Page 29: He is a son of Malkion Founder – might be - He is a son of Malkion the Founder

Page 29: He is dark and horribly visage – might be - He is dark and horribly visaged

Page 29: THE BLUE MOON – is the empty line above this intentional?

Page 29: unprepared for troubles – should be - unprepared for the troubles

Page 32: The lands of Esrolia (in the Holy Country) have always been Earth worshippers – might be - The inhabitants of Esrolia (in the Holy Country) have always been Earth worshippers

Page 33: adopted the earth system – should be - adopted the Earth system

Page 33: This was during the Golden Age, conmythory - no idea what the last word should be.

Page 34: Imarja philosophy – possibly - Imarjan philosophy

Page 34: She received gifts different from her sister’s – should be - She received gifts different from her sisters’

Page 35: Esrola laid between the base of the Spike – might be - Esrola lay between the base of the Spike

Page 35: She fought all who threatened her sister. She danced upon the earth with a frenzy, destroying all who threatened her sisters – unnecessary duplication?

Page 35: thrust himself up from deep – might be - thrust himself up from the deep – or - thrust himself up from the depths

Page 36: Jorestl - is this the correct name?

Page 36: sea god – should be – Sea God [General comment]

Page 36: SESHNA LIKITA is a daughter of Gata and Genert, and the land goddess of Ralios – not Seshnela? Suspect the allocation of Ralios has slipped from the entry about Ralia.

Page 36: she is the mother Kanthor and Jorestl - should be - she is the mother of Kanthor and Jorestl

Page 36: Storm god – should be Storm God [General comment]

Page 36: Water gods – should be – Water Gods [General comment]

Page 39: as well, if need be, - should be - as well, if need be.

Page 39: need for aids in her work – might be - need for aid in her work

Page 40: (herself a daughter of Larnste (Change, or Mobility Rune) and Harana Ilor (Harmony Rune)) – possibly these are intended as markers for actual Rune symbols?

Page 40: God’s Age life – should be - Gods Age life

Page 43: and is fearsome god of Love and War – possibly - and is the fearsome god of Love and War

Page 43: Sun god – should be – Sun God [General comment, also sun god]

Page 45: wielding the powers – might be - wielding their powers

Page 46: Praxian animal nomads – should be - Praxian Animal Nomads

Page 47: Storm gods – should be – Storm Gods [General comment]

Page 47: Kolati – might be in italics [General comment, and also not always given a capital letter.]

Page 48: placed aside his plough – should be – put aside his plough

Page 48: the lock-bed on one of Orlanth’s sons – should be - the lock-bed of one of Orlanth’s sons

Page 48: Urengerum the Archer – usually named as Sagittus?

Page 48: Humakt idealizes the honorable intentions and beliefs of the Air Gods with a single-minded intention and direction – suggest - Humakt idealizes the honorable intentions and beliefs of the Air Gods with a single-minded purpose and direction

Page 48: combatants noted – suggest – combatants recorded [note used just above]

Page 49: engaged in a duel of skills as trial of innocence – might be - engaged in a duel of skills as a trial of innocence

Page 49: and system snobbery – reads oddly. Possibly - and systemic snobbery or - and a system of snobbery

Page 50: The constellation of ten yellow stars (prior to its three-year disappearance that began in 1621 and ended in 1624, it had seven yellow stars) – usually described as orange.

Page 50: and ended in 1624 – The Coming Storm/The Eleven Lights has the Three New Stars appear in 1622 and follow the path of Orlanth’s Ring. This should be mentioned.

Page 50: thus deserves – should be – thus deserve

Page 51: Sh‘harkazeel – should be – Sh’harkazeel

Page 51: utuma – should be in italics? [General comment]

Page 51: He passed the region – should be - He passed through the region

Page 51: Earth goddess – should be – Earth Goddess [General comment]

Page 51/52: divine dialogue might be in italics?

Page 55: Hofhadalos’s – to be consistent with usage elsewhere, should be - Hofhadalos’

Page 56: see you. “ - should be - see you."

Page 57: Orlanth made his Vingkot the king – should be - Orlanth made his son Vingkot the king

Page 57: Voriof the Shepherd – multiple uses of ‘is said’ – suggest is claimed and similar for variety

RESUME at Page 58

Page 73: people have a faith, knowledged - might be - people have a faith, knowledge

Page 74: a mischevious deity named Raven - should be - a mischievous deity named Raven

Page 74: the dieties could impose upon history - should be - the deities could impose upon history

Page 74: the mystjhs are full of tales - should be - the myths are full of tales

Page 75: Such are the vaguaries of history - should be - Such are the vagaries of history

Page 76: defense of Whiteall against the Lunar Empire - should be - defense of Whitewall against the Lunar Empire

Page 77: Godtime - should be - God Time

Page 79: landclearing farmers - should be - land-clearing farmers

Page 80: Creasted Dragonewt - should be - Crested Dragonewt

Page 81: active in human affairs onece again - should be - active in human affairs once again

Page 81: Godtime - should be - God Time

Page 82: Godtime - should be - God Time

Page 83: Mostal siezed the immortal nail - should be - Mostal seized the immortal nail

Page 86: Empire of the Wyrm’s Friends - should be - Empire of the Wyrms Friends

Page 86: Godtime - should be - God Time

Page 86: secretly overground - should be - secretly over-ground

Page 87: which hithertofor had dwelt securely - should be - hitherto for

Page 89: enlightment and experience - should be - enlightenment and experience

Page 90: Dark Esroliawas thrown down - should be - Dark Esrolia was thrown down

Page 93: birth of Nsalor - should be - birth of Nysalor

Page 95: become the Destroyer he saught to eradicate - should be - become the Destroyer he sought to eradicate

Page 112: ‘natural‘ - should be ‘natural’

Page 112: and honoured him - should be and honored him

Page 112: was reknowened - should be - was renowned

Page 113: passage north of Elzast - should be - passage north of Elz Ast

Page 116: sometimes called Jillaro of the Prince’s Green - elsewhere given as Jillaro-of-the-Prince’s Green.

Page 117: constructed a beautiful statue of the Sultaness - Satrapess?

Page 118: been killed or driven out - should be - been killed or driven out.

Page 120: Mad Sultinate - should be - Mad Sultanate

Page 125: Godtime - should be - God Time

Page 127: expanionist policies - should be expansionist policies

Page 127: which had just occured - should be - which had just occurred

Page 128: demigods interferred - should be demigods interfered

Page 129: Syllila - should be - Sylila

Page 129: Yanariao-ilart - should be - Yanoriao-ilart?

Page 130: against this descrecration - should be - against this desecration

Page 130: Gbjai Faces - should be Gbaji Faces

Page 130: their own satisfication - should be - their own satisfaction

Page 131: and the familes that have the rights - should be and the families that have the rights

Page 131: outsife of Raibanth - should be - outside of Raibanth

Page 132: Tharkalist familes - should be Tharkalist families

Page 137: draconic indifference . - should be - draconic indifference.

Page 137: hiding in their stronghomes - possibly strongholds?

Page 138: Ironhoof was born at ths time - should be - Ironhoof was born at this time

Page 140: Thus most Pentants - should be - Thus most Pentans

Page 140: was adoped - should be - was adopted

Page 141: This swordman returned - should be - This swordsman returned [Swordman is his name.]

Page 141: turtleshell - possibly - turtle-shell

Page 143: as a conquerer - should be - as a conqueror

Page 144: Yaandros - should be - Yarandros

Page 147: culsists - should be - cultists

Page 147: Dainty princessess - should be - Dainty princesses

Page 149: daughter of the the tragic couple - should be - daughter of the tragic couple

Page 164: Each regiments of the Sartar Magical Union - should be - Each regiment of the Sartar Magical Union

Page 164: The Sartar Magical Union was the most extraordinary innovation of Argrath’s - suggest - The Sartar Magical Union was Argrath's most extraordinary innovation

Page 166: The Stormwalkers were a mixed band of men and demigods who live at the Old Wind Temple and are devoted to the storm god Orlanth - variations in tense.

 

 

 

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OK. My potential typos detected:

Below are possible typos and suggested changes:

Page 1 Steve Swensto  should be Steve Swenston

Page 3 "The Mundane World, where mortal beings exist, is atop the surface of the Earth cube. It is square, approximately 8000 kilometers on each side." Readers are not dumb: they know a cube is made up of squares on each side. Suggest change to: "The Mundane World, where mortal beings exist, is atop the surface of the Earth cube that is approximately 8000 kilometers on each side." 
Page 3 "To the south, east, and west all lie oceans: the Homeward, Kahar, and Neliomi." The Guide (Page 462-3) lists Kahar and Neliomi as Seas.  Also south is Solkathi and Rozgali Seas with Homeward ocean far away.
Page 3 "The Janube River runs from the Sweet Sea east of her to the Western Ocean". Change to: The Janube River runs from the Sweet Sea east of her towards the Western Ocean. OR. The Janube River runs from the Sweet Sea east of her to the Neliomi Sea.
Page 4 "The hilly regions of Ralios are thickly inhabited with Elder Races, including Aldryami, Trolls, Dragonewts, and several Mostali cities".. First mention of these races. Therefore change to: including Aldryami (elves)Uz (trolls), Dragonewts, and several Mostali (dwarves) cities".
NB Page 67 "Heortlings, Dragonewts, Aldryami, Uz [delete: trolls], and even the Gold Wheel Dancers."
Page 4 "...dangerous White Sea." "...dangerous Keniryan Sea (White Sea)." Keniryan Sea is its name in the Guide.
Page 4 : "She is thickly populated with humans, yellow elves, and dwarves." As there as many brown elves as dwarves, change to: "She is thickly populated with humans, yellow and brown elves, and dwarves."
Page 4 : "oscure creatures" change to "obscure creatures"
Page 4 : "To its north is the Homeward Ocean." Change to: "To its north are the Dashomo, Marthino, and Maslo Seas."
Page 4 : "West, past the lands of men, rolls the chill Western Sea, which has no bounds." Actually west of Pametela is Swermela Sea and beyond that is Slon.
Page 5 : The specific Runes are described below, by category.
 
 

Some more corrections with the change highlighted in bold:

Page 14 "Dragon Pass residents are certain of four, and suspect many others, sometimes without justification." Four are listed, not three

Page 14  "The Green Dragon: The smallest of the four True Dragons known to men,"

Page 17  4. ORENOAR --  make this bold please, as the rest of the gods list
Page 36 "SESHNA LIKITA is a daughter of Gata and Genert, and the land goddess of Seshnela."
There is also a discrepancy with SESHNA LIKITA (page 36) being just SESHNA in the rest of the document, please fix
Page 42 "The single moment when the Sun acted out of the ordinary is called Sunstop (375 S.T.) and is universally"
Page 93 The year 375 was critical for Glorantha.
Page 101 "ULURDA is" Please use 'is' not 'was'. The rest of the goddesses have 'is'.
Page 101 "DANFIVE XARON was" (lower case)
Page 105  1Syranthir opposed Arimdalla the Silver Lord, who was backed by the God Learners. In 719, [Missing text]
 
 
 
Errors with matching up Lunar Calendar and ST calendar:

Page 119: In 4/34 (1443) trouble fell first amid the very

Page 120: In 4/35 (1444), the Red Moon visibly dimmed

Page 120: In 4/37 (1446), the Sable People opposed

Page 120: In 4/40 (1449), the Emperor seized the

Page 122: In 5/2 (1465), the Lunar Army provoked the last of -- adding in (1465),

Page 123:  In 5/2 (1465) aged 19, she went on her

Page 124:  In 5/7 (1470), aged 24, she went on her Godquest,

Page 124:  In 5/2 (1465) after the Battle of Iron Fences,

Page 131: In 6/47 (1564), he reorganized the Provincial System.

Page 132: In 7/30 (1601), much of the royal household

Page 133: An attempt by the rebels to take Yuthuppa was defeated in 7/53 (1624) by Jar-eel
 
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This evening's catch.

Pages 48, 55, 56, 66, 161: Lightbringers Quest – elsewhere given as – Lightbringers’ Quest

General: Found Child or Foundchild? Both versions used in the document.

General: Underworld or underworld? The former seems correct but both forms appear in the document

General: Heroquest or heroquest? Both forms appear in the document

General: tone of the document varies – either past or present tense, and sometimes presented as ‘our’ tales [see Page 67] and sometimes from an ‘outside’ perspective. I suspect this derives from the various sources used to populate the document and can’t be easily adjusted.

Page 59: called ‘the devil’ – should be - called ‘the Devil’

Page 59: for the chaotic armies – should be - for the Chaotic armies [General comment – chaotic should be Chaotic?]

Page 60: Resisters still held out – might be - Resistance still held out.

Page 61: cast to Hell – might be - cast into Hell

Page 61: section Wakboth the Devil duplicates material on preceding pages – suggest it be deleted as it does not belong in The Unholy Trio section.

Page 61: section Kajabor the God of Entropy duplicates material on preceding pages – suggest it be deleted as above, with the last paragraph moved forward to conclude the Thed section.

Page 61: Death-hound – should be – Deathhound [as per earlier in the document]?

Page 62: to the void – should be - to the Void

Page 62: The Devil entered the world; with him came the slimy hordes of Chaos. Foremost in his father’s (the Devil’s) favor was Tien – this does not make sense. Suggest - The Devil entered the world; with him came the slimy hordes of Chaos. Foremost in his favor was Tien

Page 62: which used strategy – suggest - which used a strategy

Page 62: But all ways Tien chose – suggest - But all the ways Tien chose

Page 63: until the Sky God’s son – Hrothmir was a son of an Air God.

Page 63: knowledge of others-those – should be: knowledge of others – those

Page 63: Snake Pipe Hollow – should be – Snakepipe Hollow [see page 165]

Page 63: and for survival required the Power from intelligent beings – might be - and for survival devoured the Power of intelligent beings

Page 64: in the mighty sky-bull – sky-bulls are described as the descendants of Storm Bull but Storm Bull is not a sky-bull?

Page 64: She is known to have been killed by the god of entropy sometime during the Great Darkness – Page 58 tells us explicitly that he/she was killed by the Unholy Trio. Whilst this is an intentional example of mythic uncertainty, the contradiction sits uneasily in one chapter.

Page 64: Illumined – possibly – Illuminated

Page 65: In the Third Age, Red Goddess woke the cult – should be - In the Third Age, the Red Goddess woke the cult

Page 66: order and chaos – suggest - Order and Chaos

Page 66: Zzabur the Sorcerer Supreme, - should be - Zzabur the Sorcerer Supreme.

Page 67: Dragons Nest – or – Dragons’ Nest [page 35]?

Page 67: Queen Merngala the Great was the daughter of Queen Norinel and the Only Old One and the Silver Age queen of Nochet – confusing. Suggest - Queen Merngala the Great was the daughter of Queen Norinel, the Silver Age queen of Nochet, and the Only Old One

Page 67: They settled in the right arm – should be – They settled in the Right Arm

Page 68: He would anger the Esrolians when he dug in their necropolis – might be - He angered the Esrolians when he dug in their necropolis

Page 68: the elf Fwalfa Oakheart,; - should be - the elf Fwalfa Oakheart;

Page 68: Speaking Wheel,; and – should be - Speaking Wheel; and

Page 68: The whole of their tale is beyond the scope of this essay – suggest removing this sentence

RESUME AT Page 70

Page 105 and other pages: Urox – named elsewhere as Storm Bull. This Orlanthi name for Storm Bull should be mentioned on page 46. Newcomers to Glorantha won’t know that Urox is Storm Bull.

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5 hours ago, jongjom said:

OK. My potential typos detected:

 

There's an overlap between our comments, and differences as well, because it requires numerous reviewers to detect as many errors as possible. Have asked on the 13th Age Kickstarter Comments a few days ago how long we have to do this, but no reply as yet.

I haven't been looking at dates - always leave that to a last pass through.

Personally, I'd like to work from a Word document with Track Changes as it takes an appreciable time to type up comments... Have been sending a batch of comments each day, but as there's been no response, will continue to give them here and send a concatenated list when finished.

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It's a great achievement.

p. 17 I might check sources to see if we're talking about a "Red Class Tower" or a Red "Glass" Tower since while this story was previously unknown to me, the distinction has ramifications for deep lunar magic.

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4 hours ago, scott-martin said:

It's a great achievement.

p. 17 I might check sources to see if we're talking about a "Red Class Tower" or a Red "Glass" Tower since while this story was previously unknown to me, the distinction has ramifications for deep lunar magic.

The original has the Red Glass Tower Joke (Wyrms Footprints p36).  It may be related to the City of Rose Colored Glass in Teshnos (Guide p433).  

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3 hours ago, Jeff said:

Thanks guys. I'll get these into the document. I've been working on the Wane maps.

Jeff, having access to a Word version would facilitate this exercise enormously, as it takes time to write up the comments.

If you could send me (and other volunteers?) a Word copy then by using Track Changes this exercise could be speeded up. Depending on the level of reported errors I could combine those reported here.

As noted by email my free time has taken a significant hit due to family concerns, so I can only spend three or four hours a day on this exercise. It really requires the same attention as KoS and RQ2 as many of the errors look to be scanning bugs, and would sign another NDA if necessary. For that matter, the PDF is not copy protected, but it would take too long to paste and transfer the whole document into Word without problems - I have tried...

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A Word version would be nice.

Anyway, this morning's work so far:

Page 11 even though the cultures had never met and were separated by oceans, mountains[comma] and languages.
Page 39 "War of the Gods" is use twice, before settling into "Gods War". Maybe just keep the first one for dramatic effect?
Page 43 It disappeared in the late Second Age, but reappeared in 1625 amid great portents and terrible omens. (The Guide has "They had sailed on the maiden voyage of the new Boat Planet and" during the Dragonrise Page 735. The questing for this started the year before, but its first reappearance was 1625).
Page 43 “He was born,” says a prayer, “[w]ith great noise, deafening, disabling,
Page 46 "The father of the Storm Bull was Umath himself, the Allfather of Storm. His mother was Mikyh." The document is listing Umath's sons, so maybe it would be better to reword this and give a snippet about his mother?
Maybe: Storm Bull's parents were Allfather of Storm and mother Mikyh.....
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