Risto Welling

Page 379: Rune Priest Please clarify, if this rune priest is specially a shamanpriest able to sacrifice POW, or if all Rune Priests are Shaman priests, or did you ment to use work "Rune Priest". "Rune Priests Spirit cults don’t have proper Rune Priests, so Priests of Black Fang are shamans, instead. Like most shamanpriests, they can sacrifice POW for the cult’s Rune points." Page 400, Logical Mind, Not sure, but: "This spell defends the subject from the effects of mindaltering magic, including Befuddle or a vampire’s Enthrall," Should that be: "mind altering" or "milnd-altering"? Page 419, "Increasing POW Through Spell Use or Spirit Combat POW can increase because of use of POW during situations of stress. An adventurer can attract POW from the universe with the high emotional output found during a crisis. If an adventurer obtains a success either attacking or parrying during spirit combat, POW can be increased or wth successful POW vs. POW resistance roll. Spells that have a 95% chance of success against an enemy do not provide sufficient stress to allow a POW gain roll." Should that be: "a success by either", "or with successful" and "enemy does not provide". Page 426, Aging Not sure, but: "5. Aging Increase all adventurers’ ages by 1 year. In game terms, all aging is done during the Sacred Time, regardless of the adventurers’s actual birth date" Should that be either "adventurers' " or "Adventurer's " ?

Page 346, Suppress Lordril Not sure but: "Rune Masters of Light, Heat, or Sky Runebased cults" Maybe that should be something like: "Rune Masters of Light, Heat or Sky Rune based cults" Page 354, Horned Man Not sure, but: "the Horned Man’s other self awoke to timeless possibilities and became his mirror" Should that be "self-awoke" ? Page 371, Possessions: Please Clarify, What are "sendings". ". Examples include disease spirits, sendings, Passion spirits, and hauntings " Page 374, Spirit Vortices "revisit a previously known vortex. Generally, it takes 1D6 hours to reach a spirit vortice." Should that be: "Vortices". Page 378, "Hill of Orlanth Victorious: Where Orlanth (and later Harmast Barefoot) began the Lightbringers’ Quest. Mostly elemental and human spirits; wellguarded by the Orlanth cult." Should that be "well guarded"?

Page 277, Benefits. Not sure, but: "There are eight additional principle benefits to being a Rune Priest," Should that be "benefits to be a Rune Priest" or "benefits for being a Rune Priest" Page 329, Group Laughter Not sure, but: "funny when told to those affected ". That sounds better to me as: "funny when told those affected" Page 331, Illusory Sight, Not sure but: "which registers upon lightsensitive organs" Should that be "light sensitive"? Page 333, Invisibility, Not sure, but: "If the subject makes a noise, an enemy can try to strike by sound alone, at a –50% chance of success." Should these sentences be separated with the semicolon? Or a word like "then"?

Page 192, The Melee. "lthough these phases are taken in turn, the actitivies they address occurs more-orless simultaneously.". Should that be "Activities" ? Page 231, Conflicting Runes. "selfintrospection", Should that be "self introspection"? Page 272, Worship. Not sure, but: " unused as they are to dealing with powerful spiritual forces" Should that be "are to deal with", or "are dealing with".

Not sure, but: "If an earth elemental lacks any damage bonus," Should that be: "lack"? Page 88, Earth Elemental. Page 91, Vishi backround story: There is double "and". . I saw Pavis liberated, and there I found friends in Vasana and and her allies.

Vasanas Saga, Page 82. That should be "her weapons are another 10 ENC" "The total ENC for her armor is 9 ENC, that of her weapons is another 10 ENC. Given that her maximum ENC is only 14, Vasana cannot carry all her weapons while wearing armor"

Not the best in English, but in sentence "...its edless uncertainty inspire you with..." Ain't the "endless" demanding use of "inspires" ? (page 2). In sentence: by photographic, optical, electronic, or other media or methods of storage and retrival, is prohibited., Should it be retrieval? (page 2) Pregenerated => Pre generated (page 3) Not sure, but "...Each player plays their adventurer consistent..." could be written "them". (page 5). "Rune affinities is always..." Should be "are". (Page 7, Everyone Has Magic). Not sure about this, but "By advancing within a cult, an adventurer gains magical power and important temporal resources". Should that be "gain"? (page 8, Cults). "them when captured, and avenges them when injured." Is the comma needed? "...civilization they defend, and is rarely at home in the civilized world", Is comma needed? (Page 11, Heroes & Heroquesting) Should "openended" be written "open-ended"? (Page 23, Getting Started. ) "Groundsmen". Should that be "groundmen"? (Page 26, Sartar) "Dragonkind", should that be "Dragonkin"? (Page 26, Specific Passions Described) "The most common of these groups is the clan.". Should that be "The clan is most common of these groups". (Page 28, Clans). "...and longterm marriages intended...", Should that be "long-term"? (page 33, Marriage). "In 1620, Farnan was one of the volunteer", Should that be "volunteers". (page 46, Vasana's Saga). "selfdefined", Should that be "self defined", (Page 50 , Harmony/Disorder runes. ) "Many wander from city to city, supporting themselves through teaching", Should that be "Wanders"? (page 70, Philosopher).

Some credist are First name - Last name, and others, Last Name -First name. Not a big deal, but could be same for all. Would make it easier for people to recognize them later on.