MOB Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Please post any errors/typos spotted in The Smoking Ruin & Other Stories to this thread. Please take care to note the page number where you've noticed something! We'll keep this tribal edit open for a week or two. We'll then review the thread and make any necessary changes to the files before sending to print. Many thanks 2 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jongjom Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 (edited) Page 37 It is possible if the players overthink the adventure kickoff or choose to not gather their data while in Clearwine, they may be operating without Daravala’s deadline. - - could this sentence be made clearer? [it might just be that I failed my Read roll here] Page 39 No one is sure, but stories exist of a battle when Vamargic’s trolls met Braineater’s forces on the slopes just south of the settlement and slaughtered them. - -- Better explains who slaughtered who? No one knows what happened to Braineater; according to the stories she and her force seem to have disappeared. - Braineater was female (Trollpak page 28) Page 41 famous singer and to use her highly developed social skills to gain Reputation. Page 42 (Donandar, see sidebar above), Harmonise (1 pt., see above), and Switch Places (2 pts., see above). Items with an asterisk are enhanced with an Armoring Enchantment, - -- Armouing Enchantment is currently unavailable in RQG (page 435) Spirit Combat Damage: 1D6+1 - -- POW+CHA = 29 Spirit Magic: Befuddle (2 pt.), Demoralize (2 pt.), Healing 2. Page 44 Snake Pipe Hollow à Snakepipe Hollow Page 46 INT 13 POW 18 CHA 17 - -- Correct sequence Edited December 23, 2019 by jongjom Further possible correction 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jongjom Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Page 46 Armor: Heavy scale hauberk (5 pts.), closed helm (5 pts.), bronze greaves (6 pts.), vambraces (6 pts). -- Assuming right side is bronze and the left one unenchanted iron Magic Points: 64 (18 + 46 with... -- Allied (19); Bound spirit (16); Power crystal (11) Page 47 Treasures: Ironshort sword (not enchanted), iron left vambrace (not enchanted). Possession of these in their unattuned state reduces her chance to cast magic by –15% and has a 15% chance magic do not work on her. - A bronze vambrace has an ENC of 2 Sora Goodseller’s Hit Locations Right Arm 6/5 Left Arm 6/5 Head 5/6 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jongjom Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Page 53 When it returns to Treya, it is weighty with praise expressed in the form of Lunar silver. -- Are they still using Lunar coins at this point in time? Page 54 The adventurers may have to scramble to get Daravala the price estimates she desires, as Sora certainly is of no help. -- At this point of the scenario, what does this mean? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jongjom Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Page 57 Spirit Combat Damage: 1D6+1 Page 66 They leave the adventurers alone if they simply pass through the valley. Spirit Combat Damage: 1D6+1 Page 72 She wants nothing more than to get inside the citadel walls, but she is not be foolhardy or puts anyone’s life at risk. -- Rephrase? Page 73 The outer walls of the ruins are about 10 to 12 meters tall, Page 79 Hombadaka Boko was a troll settlement during the Dawn Age, over a thousands and thousands of years ago. Page 83 part of Braineater’s troops, and have the markings of her troops Page 85 to join Kyger Litor in Hell. Page 90 (x3 occasions) Hell Page 90 She was originally a priestess of Kyger Litor Page 91 These are mainly children’s toys: dolls, small clay soldiers, bits of doll clothing, etc. -- Not very trollish?? Page 92 One-Eye Bugleg Add CHA score? General Point Are you really sure One-Eye Bugleg was a trollkin? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sumath Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Page 12 Description of Duck Point: "Round reed-roofed huts are piled practically on top of each other, wooden walkways stretch over marshland and water, and big nets hang up everyone" What does this mean? Re-word to make this clearer? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jongjom Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 (edited) Page 94 Thinala Tindal Spirit Combat Damage: 1D6+3 Edited December 29, 2019 by jongjom Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jongjom Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Page 14 Multiple symbols above denote a single stone with combined features. -- Not sure what you mean by this. Do you mean: Multiple symbols on The Wild Temple map below denote a single stone with combined features. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sumath Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Page 38 boxed text "Originally small, the settlement eventuallyit became a center for Ernaldan and Orlanthi worship" Remove word in bold Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Joerg Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 p.67 (A Minotaur at Prayer) the minotaur explains in halting Tradetalk that Kero Fin is the mother of Verhala Velhara, the Lady of the Beasts, as well as the mother of Orlanth, p68 Clatterhoof Initiate of Verhala. Velhara p.68 The adventurers have not spoken to Ereneva, breaking their promise to Daravala to keep their mouths shut about their destination. Telling how it is excessive verbis Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David Scott Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 There are three different spellings of Shanasee in the book: The most popular is Shanassee with 7, although not in the index. The Guide agrees that this is the correct spelling. Shanasee, once - page 167 Shanaesee, two - page 4 and page 192 (index) ----- Search the Glorantha Resource Site: https://wellofdaliath.chaosium.com. Search the Glorantha mailing list archives: https://glorantha.steff.in/digests/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sumath Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Page 63 Seven Foals Vale is referred to as "Seven Fouls Valley" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sumath Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Three items on Page 81: "The troll spirits’ movement is only be choreographed if One-Eye is nearby, directing their dance." Remove word in bold "The gamemaster should determine which by considering the way the adventurers gained entrance, whether they encountered One-Eye, and whether is she escorting the adventurers into the Ruin" Words in bold in wrong order "In any settlement area (with the grey background on the map) it perpetually gloomy, humid and smoke filled" Insert 'is' after word in bold Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jongjom Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Can you please standardised the Stats Blocks "Rune Spells: " sections for each character to keep it consistent within the book and with the GM Pack Adventure Book. After "Rune Spells:" Delete" All common knowledge spells," or "All common Rune spells," or "All common knowledge Rune spells " AND Delete all (x pt.) AND the numbers after the spells, for example: Page 17 Rune Spells: All common knowledge spells, plus Charisma (1 pt.), Clever Tongue (1 pt.), Draw Beast (1 pt.). Change to Rune Spells: Charisma, Clever Tongue, Draw Beast. Page 20 Rune Spells: All common knowledge spells, plus Flight (1 pt.), Leap (1 pt.), Mist Cloud (1 pt.), Shield 2, Wind Words (1 pt.). Change to Rune spells: Flight, Leap, Mist Cloud, Shield, Wind Words. Page 152 Rune Spells: All common knowledge Rune spells plus Fearless (2 pt.), Shield 2. Change to Rune Spells: Fearless, Shield. Page 175 Rune Spells: All common Rune spells plus Create Ghost (1 pt.), Create Skeleton (1 pt.), Mindblast (2 pts.), Sever Spirit (non-reusable, 3 pts.), Summon Small Lune (1 pt.), Summon Medium Lune (2 pts.). Change to Rune Spells: Create Ghost, Create Skeleton, Mindblast, Sever Spirit (non-reusable, 3 pt.), Summon Small Lune, Summon Medium Lune. Do FIND "Rune Spells: All" to capture all these Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jongjom Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Page 177 Warrior of the Iron Dwarf caste Appears male, age 320. Skills: Battle 30%, --- Probably should be a higher value Iron Dwarf Hit Locations If the armour is unenchanted iron then drop the Hit Point Location values to 6/5 6/5 7/5 6/6 6/4 6/4 6/5 The weapons are also unenchanted iron, so 1H Hammer, Iron PTS 10 Battle Axe, Iron PTS 8 Page 179 Dark Season 1629 Lists three sets of trolls (Dark, Great, Trollkin) each giving written text describing a singular character, then listing a "Typical" type, i.e. "Typical Dark Troll Foot Warrior". Can you please match the text and headers so they are consistent? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sumath Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Page 36 "The adventurers should figure out how sneak into the ruins, fight off any guardians, and escape with the evidence" Insert 'to' after word in bold Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sumath Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Also Page 36 "such as new initiates, minstrels and storytellers to spread the world" Word in bold should be 'word' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sumath Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Page 38 "Their decisions are the key to how that that performance plays out." Word repeated erroneously Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sumath Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 Page 41 "Ultimately, her goals are become an expertin History of the Dawning" Insert 'to' and 'the' respectively, after words in bold Page 47 "While this could true, the real reason he was eavesdropping" Insert 'be' after word in bold Page 53 "Thus, it not out of the question that Treya might flirt" Replace word in bold with 'it's' "The gamemaster’s goal is make sure the adventurers" Insert 'to' after the word in bold Page 54 "her grandmother’s many encounters encounter with Tuskers" Word repeated erroneously Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Joerg Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 P.39 The Beast Men left the corpses to rot, but before they left, they hired a nearby Grazer clan to help them erect a memorial to those Beast Men who died in the fight. Nice try to get the Grazers involved in this, but this battle takes place 28 years before the Battle of Alavan Argay which was the end of the Pure Horse Folk of Prax and started the Grazer history. The Inhuman Occupation was still intact, there were no Grazers nearby, or any other humans except possibly Hiia Swordsman or the Puppeteers, or Isidilian's human slaves crewing the Cannon Cult and the Alchemical Transformer. If there is to be Grazer involvement in this monument, the centaurs may have asked them for their help after the adoption of the Pure Horse Folk, three decades later, when the pyres had long been set on fire. But then I doubt that the nomadic Pure Horse Folk of Prax had any skill in masonry - those who might had switched to striped mounts and were the (not yet quite exiled or trapped) zebra rider nobility in Pavis, beset by the Beast Riders. 2 Telling how it is excessive verbis Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
scott-martin Posted December 23, 2019 Share Posted December 23, 2019 (edited) 2 hours ago, Joerg said: Nice try to get the Grazers involved in this, but this battle takes place 28 years before the Battle of Alavan Argay which was the end of the Pure Horse Folk of Prax and started the Grazer history. These might be the earlier horse people who find a loophole through association with Ironhoof, then are later assimilated into the "vendref" who preserve eyewitness accounts. The un-stitched bipedal line of Harfraftos. Modern people would just see "grazers." Edited December 23, 2019 by scott-martin 1 singer sing me a given Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sid Vicarious Posted December 24, 2019 Share Posted December 24, 2019 Page 35 "Performance". Should this read "Play Instrument", "Sing", or both? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Joerg Posted December 24, 2019 Share Posted December 24, 2019 (edited) p.87 protect a hand-sized shard of silvered glass On the same page, the boxed text describes the item nicely Bronze-Agey as Quote a highly polished shard of copper in the shape of a disk with a small handle protruding from the bottom, No glass involved, silver optional. That description of the depiction on the rear is of course a temporal paradox - the item is exchanged at the Wedding of the deities, whereas the transmogrification of Ginna Jar into the recipient of the item is the reward for the LBQ on the cusp of Time. This means that this item might be a heroquest reward of a re-enactment of the original wedding, with the physical component provided by the (undoubtedly royal) quester rather than the God Time original. That's fine as far as holy relics go, but it is B-grade, a very powerful copy. The boxed text also has "Violence is always an alternative" in the second repetition, rather than "Violence is always an option". Please amend this to option, as this is a catch-phrase, and the point of it is that Orlanth doesn't even consider alternatives until getting repeat demonstrations. Edited December 24, 2019 by Joerg Telling how it is excessive verbis Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oracle Posted December 24, 2019 Share Posted December 24, 2019 (edited) 2 hours ago, Joerg said: p.87 ... The boxed text also has "Violence is always an alternative" in the second repetition, rather than "Violence is always an option". Please amend this to option, as this is a catch-phrase, and the point of it is that Orlanth doesn't even consider alternatives until getting repeat demonstrations. But that's exactly how the How Peace Was Made myth is displayed (printed) in King of Sartar (regardless which edition you use) ... So either this has been misquoted from the beginning or there is some meaning in this wording ... Edited December 24, 2019 by Oracle Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oracle Posted December 24, 2019 Share Posted December 24, 2019 (edited) p.17, description of Dera Zarka: Dera is Krola Sein’s younger sister ... should be Dera is Krola Sien’s younger sister ... p.192 Krola Sein 17 should be Krola Sien 17 Edited December 24, 2019 by Oracle Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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